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LEVELS 3–5 En KE\b STAGE 2 2012 Engl\bsh tests Mark sche\be Wr\bt\bng and Spell\bng Nati\bnal curriculum assessments© Crown copyright 2012 STA/12/5595 \bSBN 978–1– 4459–5227–7 You may re-use this information (excluding logos) free of charge in any format or medium, under the terms of the Open Government Licence. To view this licence, visit http://www.nationalarchives.gov.uk/doc/open-government-licence/ or email psi@nationalarchives.gsi.gov.uk. Where we have identified any third-party copyright information you will need to obtain permission from the copyright holders concerned. This publication is also available for download at www.education.gov.uk/publications.
Contents Introduction3 The writing test 5 The spelling test 34
3 Introduction The Standards and Testing Agency (STA) is responsible for the development and delivery of statutory tests and assessments in 2012. STA is an executive agency of the Department for Education (DfE). Following Lord Bew’s independent review of Key Stage 2 testing, assessment and accountability, National Curriculum tests in mathematics and reading will be administered in line with previous years’ arrangements. \bnterim arrangements will be in place for writing in 2012, ahead of fully implementing Lord Bew’s recommendations for writing in 2013. \bn 2012, a pupil’s writing result will be a teacher assessed judgement of their work across year 6. Teachers’ judgements will be informed by and take account of (but not be limited by) the pupil's result on a writing test. Schools have been offered one of two writing tests in 2012. The externally marked test relating to this mark scheme and an internally marked test that was released earlier in the year. The results from either test must be used to inform teacher assessment. Only teacher assessment in writing (not test results) will be published. The teacher assessment will contribute towards an overall English level and will be used for accountability purposes. This mark scheme booklet provides information to teachers and external markers marking the externally marked writing test only. The test must be administered on Tuesday 15 May 2012 and pupil scripts must be sent for external marking. Test scripts must be sent for marking in the usual way. As in previous years, external markers will mark the test papers. The markers will follow the mark schemes in this booklet, which are provided here to inform teachers. This booklet includes the mark schemes for the assessment of writing and spelling. For ease of reference, the writing prompts have been reproduced. Level threshold tables will be published on the Department’s website at www.education.gov.uk/ks2, on 10 July 2012. The marks in the tests are allocated as follows: WritingLonger task (including handwriting) 31 Shorter task 12 Spelling 7 Total \b0
4 The mark schemes were devised after trialling the tests with pupils and contain examples of some responses given in the trials. The mark schemes indicate the criteria on which judgements should be made. \bn areas of uncertainty however, markers should exercise professional judgement based on the training they have received. The assessment focuses for writing provide information about the particular processes or skills the pupil needs to demonstrate in order to answer the questions. This information is provided in order to explain the structure of each mark scheme as well as the way in which it will be used by external markers. The assessment focuses are drawn from the National Curriculum. The 2012 Key Stage 2 English tests and mark schemes were produced by the Key Stage 2 English team at the National Foundation for Educational Research (NFER) on behalf of STA. Arrangements for sampling and moderation A sample of schools will be selected to administer this externally marked English writing test on Tuesday 15 May 2012. The results from schools in the sample will be used to monitor national standards. They will not be used for school accountability. Schools in the sample will receive results which they should use to inform teacher assessment of writing. A sample of schools’ teacher assessment judgements in English writing will also be subject to external moderation. \bn line with Lord Bew’s recommendations, moderation will look at the evidence from the ordinary marked work produced across year 6; schools will not be expected to produce any additional work or compile portfolios for moderation. Separate guidance on the moderation process will be made available on the Department’s website at www.education.gov.uk/ks2.
5 The writing test There are two mark schemes in this booklet for the writing test: one for the longer task Guest Appe\br\bnce (pages 7–11); the other for the shorter task Birdspotter(pages 25–27). Assessment focuses for writing The aspects of writing to be assessed are pupils’ ability to: 1. write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful texts 2. produce texts which are appropriate to task, reader and purpose 3. organise and present whole texts effectively, sequencing and structuring information, ideas and events 4. construct paragraphs and use cohesion within and between paragraphs 5. vary sentences for clarity, purpose and effect 6. write with technical accuracy of syntax and punctuation in phrases, clauses and sentences 7. select appropriate and effective vocabulary (this is not assessed separately, but contributes to text structure and organisation, and composition and effect) 8. use correct spelling (assessed through the spelling test). The mark scheme strands For the purpose of marking the writing, related assessment focuses have been drawn together into three strands: sentence structure and punctuation text structure and organisation composition and effect. For the longer task, the strands are organised as follows: Handwriting is assessed in the longer task. The marking criteria are shown in section F on page 11. Assessment focuses sentence structure and – vary sentences for clarity, purpose and effect punctuation – write with technical accuracy of syntax\N and punctuation in phrases, clauses and sentences. text structure and– organise and present whole texts effect\Nively, sequencing organisation and structuring information, ideas and e\Nvents – construct paragraphs and use cohesion with\Nin and between paragraphs. composition and effect – write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful\N texts – produce texts which are appropriate to ta\Nsk, reader andpurpose.
6 For the shorter task, the strands are organised as follows: The criteria encourage positive recognition of achievement in writing. Pupils do not necessarily develop uniformly across these categories, and the strands allow separate judgements to be made about the relative strengths and weaknesses of a pupil’s work. \barking procedures The criteria for each strand identify typical characteristics of pupils’ work in different bands. When marking, it is helpful first to identify which bands are most relevant to the writing and then refine the judgement to a mark within a band. Criteria from lower bands that are also applicable to higher bands should be seen as relevant to higher band descriptors. For example, the criterion Sentences \bre mostly gr\bmm\btic\blly soundappears in Band A3. However, grammatical soundness should also be taken to be an underlying feature of performance at Band A4 and Band A5, even though it is not explicitly stated at these bands. Where organisational devices are used to structure a piece of writing (eg firstly, secondly, fin\blly; furthermore; consequently ), credit should be given for evidence of effective and appropriate use. However, indiscriminate use of such devices (ie where the devices are not integrated meaningfully into the writing) should not be regarded as a positive feature of performance. The annotations on the example scripts show how to look for features in the writing, and the summary boxes show how to weigh these features to reach a mark. Where the writing clearly does not meet the criteria for Band 1, a mark of 0 should be awarded. Pupils will be expected to follow the prompt very carefully, especially in content and form. Pupils whose writing is unrelated to the prompt will not be credited with any marks for composition and effect. Those pupils who do not maintain the form throughout the piece, for example a non-fiction piece becoming narrative, will not have access to the full range of marks for composition and effect. \barking the writing A set of annotated scripts, written by year 6 pupils during the English pre-tests, is presented here to help your judgements of the writing. Scripts are reproduced without corrections to spelling. Assessment focuses sentence structure, – vary sentences for clarity, purpose and effect punctuation and text – write with technical accuracy of syntax\N and punctuation organisation in phrases, clauses and sentences – construct paragraphs and use cohesion with\Nin and between paragraphs. composition and effect – write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful\N texts – produce texts which are appropriate to ta\Nsk, readerand purpose.
7 The longer task:Guest Appearance The prompt presents the scenario of a headteacher asking pupils to suggest a well-known person to invite to the school. The task is to write a persuasive letter to the headteacher, proposing a specific guest and explaining the choice. \bdeas of guest types – a children’s writer, sportsperson or chef – are given in the prompt, but it is clear that pupils may make their own selection. The planning page helps with decisions and encourages the writer to think about how to persuade the headteacher. Better performances are distinguished by effective adaptation to justify the choice of guest convincingly to the headteacher, supported by careful organisation of each point made and sustained control of the letter’s overall structure. Guest Appearan\be Your headteacher wants to invite someone well-known into the school to work with pupils for a day. The person could be a children’s writer, a sportsperson, a chef or someone else suggested by pupils. Your task is to write a letter to your headteacher to explain who you would like to invite and persuade your headteacher why this is a good idea. Your headteacher wants to know the name of the person you would like to come and why she or he would be a good choice. You could choose a real person or an imaginary character.
8 Band A1 Clauses usually grammatically accurate. Some simple sentences, often brief, starting with a subject + verb (I w\bnt). Clauses mostly joined with \bnd,but,then. Sentences sometimes demarcated by capital letters and full stops. 1 mark \bark scheme for the longer task: Guest Appearance KECLHJ\b©ASENTENCE STRUCTURE AND PUNCTUATION Assessment focuses: vary sentences for clarity, purpose and effect write with technical accuracy of syntax and punctuation in phrases, clauses and sentences Simple connectives \bnd, but, then, so, when link clauses. Subjects and verbs often simple and frequently repeated (I think, we w\bnt). Some modals (could). Some sentence variation created, eg simple adverbials (in the kitchen, on Wednesd\by). Noun phrases mostly simple (the cl\bss) with some limited expansion (some funny jokes). Full stops, capital letters, exclamation marks and question marks mostly accurate; commas used in lists. 2 –3 marks Sentences are mostly grammatically sound. Adverbials (When they h\bve \b problem), expanded noun phrases (\b very bright children’s writer, her \bm\bzing pieces of \brt) and modals (would, might) add variety. Some variety in subordinating connectives: bec\buse, if(bec\buse the dinners \bre disgusting, if she c\bme). Tense choice generally appropriate. Some variation of subjects (The cl\bss, we, most pupils). Most sentences correctly demarcated; some commas mark phrases or clauses. 4 –5 marks Simple and complex sentences with some variety of connectives, eg while,which, who,until. Expansion of phrases and clauses adds detail (\bs he brought in recipes from his new collection). Range of verb forms develops meaning and maintains appropriate tense choice (h\bd been). Additional words and phrases contribute to shades of meaning, eg adverbs (\bddition\blly). Range of punctuation used, almost always correctly, eg brackets, dashes, colons. 6 –7 marks Length and focus of sentences varied to express subtleties in meaning and to focus on key ideas, eg passive (the school will be boosted by). Sentences may include controlled use of several subordinate clauses (te\bch them how to pl\by, or help to improve their current skills to m\bke them top pl\byers) sometimes for economy of expression. Range of punctuation, with little omission, to give clarity. \b marks Band A2 L:-dAKG L:-dAKH L:-dAK\b
9 Band B1 SECTIO\b BTEXT STRUCTURE AND ORGANISATION Assessment focuses: organise and present whole texts effectively, sequencing and structuring information, ideas and events construct paragraphs and use cohesion within and between paragraphs \bdeas grouped into sequences of sentences; there may be a brief list of points. Simple connectives used (\bnd, \bnd then). Some connection between sentences, eg pronouns referring to the same person or thing. 1 mark Text structure overall is simple: includes some points about the visit; brief introduction or conclusion. Some divisions between sections of content indicated (Also, next). Connections are built up by reference (the \bctress / she). Other relationships within and between sentences may be used, eg some connections between words maintain links (pictures / comic book). 2 –3 marks The letter is organised: introduction, points about the visit and/or person, conclusion. Shifts in topic, time or place help organise sections / paragraphs (After th\bt, In \bssembly), although transitions may be awkward. Within paragraphs or sections, content may be developed around a main sentence. Paragraphs or sections organised to expand a particular topic, eg how year 6 will help. Connections within paragraphs or sections maintained, eg through ongoing references (singer, perform\bnce, on st\bge). 4 –5 marks Overall organisation of the letter is supported by paragraphs or sections which enable coherent development and control of content across the text. Relationships between paragraphs or sections give structure to the whole text, eg a link between the opening and the conclusion, or contrast (Another gre\bt ch\br\bcteristic …). Within paragraphs or sections, main ideas are developed, eg a paragraph gives detail about a significant topic. Reference sometimes varied (the guest / speci\bl visitor). 6 –7 marks The structure of the letter is controlled across the text, eg thematic links between paragraphs or sections. Sequencing of paragraphs or sections contributes to overall effectiveness. \bndividual paragraphs varied in length and structure, eg a short paragraph next to a longer one helps to emphasise main points. Each paragraph or section has a clear focus, and content is organised, eg by reference or contrast within the paragraph (the \bdv\bnced moves will prob\bbly be next on his long list). \b marks Band B2 L:-dALG L:-dALH L:-dAL\b
10 Band C1 SECTIO\b CCO\bPOSITION AND EFFECT Assessment focuses: write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful texts produce texts which are appropriate to task, reader and purpose Some brief statements related to the prompt. Details to expand content sometimes included (he m\bkes p\bst\b). 1–2 marks Form is a simple letter with points relevant to the visit. Some development of ideas or suggestions although coverage may be unbalanced. Viewpoint sometimes evident, eg attitude expressed (enjoy it, re\blly good). Word choice often general (plenty to do, stuff) with some detail (tennis b\blls, desserts). Level of formality may be inconsistent. 3 –5 marks The form of a letter is maintained, and suggestions for the visit developed to interest headteacher (help everyone in the school, te\bch us some new w\bys to e\bt he\blthily). Balanced coverage. Viewpoint is established and maintained, eg opinions held consistently (it should \blw\bys be \bbout h\bving fun). Some straightforward stylistic features used to support purpose, eg some persuasive or descriptive vocabulary. Style of address, eg formal (some people m\by suggest th\bt) or friendly, contributes to presentation of letter. 6 –\b marks Letter to headteacher adapted, eg ideas selected to persuade and be attractive (m\bny spect\bcul\br once in \b lifetime ch\bllenges). Viewpoint is established and controlled, eg brings in views of other pupils to support own opinion (require inspir\btion). Some stylistic choices add emphasis and interest, eg persuasive and emotive vocabulary for effect (encour\bging, experienced), questions (Who w\bnts unhe\blthy children?). 9 –11 marks Choice and placing of content adapted for effect, eg letter builds up to most persuasive point. Viewpoint well controlled, eg writer is authoritative (even winning the region\bl tourn\bments). A range of stylistic features, eg figurative language supports persuasive purpose; patterning (trustworthy, responsible \bnd filled with spirit). 12 marks Band C2 L:-dAMG L:-dAMH L:-dAM\b
11 Band F1 SECTIO\b FHANDWRITING All pupils need to develop a serviceable handwriting style which is legible, clear and encourages the reader to engage with what has been written. This assessment of handwriting is based on pupils’ ability to write legibly and fluently in a sustained piece of writing. Judgements will be made on the basis of the legibility and clarity of the handwriting throughout the longer task, supported by a closer look at the size and position of words and letters. The handwriting is legible and shows some features of regularity in size and spacing. However, overall the script is disjointed and uneven. 1 mark Overall, the handwriting is regular with some flow and movement. Letters and words are usually appropriate in size and position but there is some variation. 2 marks The handwriting is consistent and fluent with letters and words appropriately placed. The handwriting maintains a personal style to engage the reader. 3 marks Band F2 L:-dAPG
12 COMPOSITION & EFFECT A simple letter with some relevant brief points ( help us in litarcy) and occasional development ( do a biograhy) (C2). A simple viewpoint is expressed ( he is a Good singer) (C2). Some detail given ( auto Graphs); formality is inconsistent ( I would like you ,please please! ) (C2). Summary In this simple letter, the writer gives some relevant reasons for the choice of visitor, providing evidence for Band C2. The inclusion of a simple viewpoint and mixture of formal and less formal language confirm the band; some further development of points in placeswould be necessary for a higher mark in the band. Band C2 – 3 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION TEXT STRUCTURE & ORGANISATION noun phrase with limited expansion (A2) repeated subject (A2) SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION Summary Use of mostly simple noun phrases, repeated subjects and modal verbs suggest award in Band A2. Limited sentence demarcation keeps the award at the lower mark in the band. Band A2 – 2 marks TEXT STRUCTURE& ORGANISATION Summary The overall text structure is simple, with a brief introduction, conclusion and a series of brief points suggesting Band B2. A division is indicated; however, limited relationships within and between sentences restricts the mark to the lower in the band. Band B2 – 2 marks repeated modals (A2) simple adverbial (A2) simple noun phrases (A2) division indicated (B2) introduction (B2) concluding statement (B2) I would like you to make dj bluebee come to the school he could do a few songs for us and could teach us how to dj. It is Also Good for him because he gets more fans and he could Do auto Graphs and he could sing while we work it could help us in litarcy as well because we could do a biograhy about him. So please, please please! let him come in he is a Good singer. connection in meaning maintains a link (B2) limited demarcation (below A2)
13 SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION TEXT STRUCTURE & ORGANISATION COMPOSITION & EFFECT Some development of content ( a chance to try new thing), including suggestions for activities during the visit ( We could ask him lots of qwestens ) (C2). The writer’s attitude is evident ( I like what he makes) (C2). Occasional detail included ( pasta’s or salad’s or pizza’s); however, word choices are mostly general ( thing,good ,food ) (C2). Summary This piece presents a simple letter with the inclusion of some relevant ideas. These features, supported by the positive viewpoint and someword choices relating to the topic, lead to a mark in Band C2. Evidence of further careful vocabulary choices would be necessaryfor the award of the highest mark in the band. Band C2 – 4 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION Summary Repetition of subjects and verbs, noun phrases with limited expansion, and modals suggest award in Band A2. Despite the lack of commas there is secure sentence demarcation, just sufficient for the award of the higher mark in the band. Band A2 – 3 marks TEXT STRUCTURE& ORGANISATION Summary Inclusion of a brief introductory and simple concluding statement, with some grouped ideas presented, suggest award in Band B2. Evidence of simple reference chains justifies the award of the higher mark in the band. Band B2 – 3 marks correct sentence demarcation (A2) repetitive sentence openings (A2) introduction (B2) noun phrases with limited expansion (A2) modals (A2) additional information indicated (B2) connection within sentence (B2) brief concluding statement (B2) I am writing to say that we should have Jemie Oliver to vist us . We can do cooking leeson. It would be a chance to try new thing. We can make pasta’s or salad’s or pizza’s. We could iven have a cooking test . W e would all injoy it. It would be a realy good time. We could ask him lots of qwestens about how did he become famous, also what his favert thing to make and what school he went to. I would like to make food for my famly and friends and to show them to how to make it. I hope that you would pick him. Your sinsily [name] p.s. I like what he makes. grouping of content creates divisions (B2)
14 COMPOSITION & EFFECT Developed explanation ( tell us to keep going) of reasons for choosing Lewis Hamilton (C\b). Balance is weakened by some repetition (below C\b). Writer’s attitude is consistent ( a significent idea,a real inspiration ) and maintained ( think parents would come ) (C\b). Stylistic features support persuasive purpose: some careful word choice ( ambitious ,determined ); formal style of address (C\b). Summary Development of content maintains form and combines with a consistent viewpoint and some vocabulary choices to merit award in Band C\b. A stronger balance of coverage with less repetition would be necessary for a higher mark in the band. Band C3 – 6 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION Summary Expanded noun phrases, adverbials and some use of complex sentences indicate award in Band A\b. There is evidence of correct sentence demarcation and additional punctuation within the sentence. However, some repetitive use of subjects and some overlong strings of clauses keep the mark at the lower in the band. Band A3 – 4 marks TEXT STRUCTURE& ORGANISATION Summary Evidence of whole text organisation and some paragraph development to expand themes, with references to maintain connection, lead to award in Band B\b. The mark is limited to the lower in the band by a weaker conclusion and some inconsistency in content development. Band B3 – 4 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION TEXT STRUCTURE & ORGANISATION shifts in topic organise some content (B\b) connection maintained through references (B\b) omission apostrophes (above A\b) secure demarcation (A\b) use of a comma to mark a division (A\b) repeated subject (below A\b) expanded noun phrases (A\b) limited control of sentence development (below A\b) whole text organisation: introduction, followed by sections (B\b) topic development: expands the theme of determination (B\b) weak conclusion (below B\b) paragraph development limited by brief introduction of several different points (B\b) subordination (A\b) adverbials (A\b) My idea for guest appearence is Lewis Hamilton. The reason I have chose this person is because, he knows what it ’ s like to win a major trophy ‘Formula 1 champion Ship’. The other reason Lewis Hamilton is a significent idea is because he is only young , which would be good too ask him questions as following: • How did you get where you are now? • How do you feel about Jenson Button being your partner? Lewis Hamilton is also a real inspiration to people of all ages. Lewis Hamilton also is in very well known companys which would be good to ask him how he feels about it. Lewis Hamilton is very good at racing (in formula 1) which has made him well known . L ewis Hamilton would also be good because he has to be ambitious when racing, so he could tell us to be more ambitious and take our chances when we get them. I feel that Lewis Hamilton would tell us to keep going and never give up and keep trying until we get what we ’ ve always dreamed for! Because Lewis Hamilton kept trying to be a formula 1 driver and because he was so determined he got the job he always wanted. I also think parents would come because Lewis Hamilton is in a job which people of all ages enjoy watching and also doing what he does. I hope you put my idea into action. Your Sincerely [name]
15 SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION TEXT STRUCTURE & ORGANISATION COMPOSITION & EFFECT Letter has balanced coverage of several points ( teach tennis,show some pictures ) and some explanation ( play against the better people ) (C\b). A positive attitude towards Maria is maintained ( brilliant sportywoman ,as happy as I am ) (C\b). Some words provide detail about the famous person’s life ( court, rackets ) to interest (C\b); other vocabulary choices are general ( people ,help ) (below C\b). Summary The letter is presented with some development of suggestions and ideas to persuade. A positive viewpoint, to promote the tennis player,is sustained, providing further evidence for Band C\b. Furtherselection of vocabulary to interest would be necessary for the highestmark in the band. Band C3 – 7 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION Summary Adverbials, expanded noun phrases and subordination suggest award in Band A\b. There is also a range of modal verbs. Although there are some inaccuracies in punctuation, correct use of brackets (above A\b) and evidence of commas to mark divisions in sentences justifies the higher mark in the band. Band A3 – \b marks TEXT STRUCTURE& ORGANISATION Summary Within sections, there is evidence of varied references to maintain connections. A logical overall structure is presented and divisions are used to organise points. These features, in combination , merit the award of the higher mark in Band B\b. Band B3 – \b marks brackets (above A\b) whole text organisation: introduction sequenced points conclusion (B\b) reference provides link (B\b) subordination (A\b) accurate demarcation (A\b) commas to mark divisions (A\b) connections maintained within paragraphs (B\b) divisions indicated (B\b) expanded noun phrases (A\b) I am writing to you to say about a famous person coming to our school. I think that we should invite Maria Sharapova, ( Tennis player ) , she is a brilliant sportywoman that pupils would enjoy meeting. She could teach tennis to the beginners, that would be easy for her, because of her amazing skills . Or she could play against the better people . M aybe she could tell us what it’s like to be out on the outstanding court. Also she could show some pictures of her rappidly winning a match. If she were to come , she could bring us some nets or some of her rackets . S he is famous so maybe she might sign a picture of her to give to us and sign it. I would be very overjoyed if you invited Maria , also the other pupils might be as happy as I am! She is a very talented, lovely, caring person . Furthermore , she could help out round our classroom or tell us about herself when she was our age. I do hope you take these ideas into mind. Yours sincerely [name] varied modals (A\b) adverbials (A\b)
16 COMPOSITION & EFFECT Adaptation of letter to present chosen ideas to persuade ( educational for everyone ) and appeal to the reader ( \bs you can see) by focusing on what would happen during the visit (C4). An informed viewpoint ( Because she is a famous writer ) with the views of others considered ( some children don’t like assembilies ) (C4). Some emotive vocabulary for effect ( facinating,fantastic ,will be intreged ) (C4) but other word choice is repetitive ( benifit, insparational ) (below C4). Summary A thorough and informative letter to persuade the headteacher with development of suggestions and ideas chosen to persuade indicatesaward in Band C4. This is supported by controlled viewpoint. Stylistic choices are limited in some places by the repetition of severalwords; this keeps the mark to the middle of the band. Band C4 – 10 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION Summary Sentences are expanded by phrases and clauses to add detail, with a range of subordinating connectives. Verb forms are varied and appropriate tense is mainly controlled. Punctuation supports meaning and adds further evidence for award of the higher mark in Band A4. Band A4 – 7 marks TEXT STRUCTURE& ORGANISATION Summary The overall structure of the letter is shaped by the use of subheadings and further established by links between some sections. Content is developed in sections with relevant detail, confirming the higher mark in Band B4. Band B4 – 7 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION TEXT STRUCTURE & ORGANISATION controlled overall structure (B4): developed introduction sections grouped by subheadings conclusion varied connectives (A4) additional words and phrases for shades of meaning (A4) expansion adds detail (A4) range of punctuation (A4): brackets comma to mark clauses dash ellipsis range of complex verb forms (A4) variation in sentence type (A4): question link with previous section established (B4) chronology provides link across text (B4) development of a significant topic within a paragraph (B4) conclusion links closely to introduction (B4) Our class have been asked to choose a famous person ( who we think we could benifit from ) to come into our school for a day . I personaly think that Jaquiline Wilson should come in because she has wrote many childrens books and could show us how to write a good, facinating story! Workshops Because she is a famous writer , Jaquilines visit could be very educational for everyone. She is very insparational and would encourage children to take up story writing as they will need it in the future; they would also be able to write at some story\bwriting workshops set up where children could have the oppertunity to have a go at writing their own fictional piece of work.Classroom talks Dispite her doing the writing workshops , she could come round the classes and show everyone how she comes up with all her ideas for her fantastic childrens stories – what makes a good piece of writing. After an ispirational talk from Jaquline Wilson, the magority of the school will be intreged to do more writing, which the teachers would also benifit from because the pupils will be begging to learn some more so they too could be an auther. Storytime At the end of the day,instead of an assembily , Jaquiline could read to the pupils part of one of her amazing books: The suitecase kid, The bed and breakfast star …. Furthermore, some children don’t like assembilies so they would have something to look forward to! As you can see I am very keen on the idea of Jaquiline Wilson coming to our school , so I do hope that you can make it happen. She would be very insparational and we could all benefit from her visit. Don’t you think so? Yours sincerely [name]
17 SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION TEXT STRUCTURE & ORGANISATION OaW@acV:VaYABARSSRO: Content adapted for effect: most significant reasons placed first (Very high on my list ) and informative explanations provided ( the deep sea ,or the shara desert were animals have evoleved ) (C5). Authoritative viewpoint is well controlled (educational programs, certinly be able to teach us) (C5). Stylistic features include phrases to support a conversational approach (maybe even inspire, surly they would learn,life is not just about) and patterning for effect (my insperational icon, a whole new perseptive for some people) (C5). Summary In this engaging and realistic letter, the writer presents a purposeful adaptation of ideas that are selected to convince. The knowledgeable point of view is combined with stylistic features designed to encouragethe reader to endorse the choice, meriting the award of the top mark. Band C\b – 12 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE & PUNCTUATION Summary Variation in length and focus of sentences develops meaning. This is supported by the use of expanded sentences with subordinate clauses and some economic expression. These features, combined with a range of punctuation used to support meaning, justify the award of the highest mark. Band A\b – 8 marks TEXT STRUCTURE& ORGANISATION Summary Overall structure is controlled, with clear connections between paragraphs. A final paragraph links previous points effectively. Focus within paragraphs organises content, confirming the award of the top mark. Band B\b – 8 marks paragraph with clear focus (A5) range of punctuation for clarity (A5): consistent capitalisation of names quotation marks exclamation mark sentence variation: short sentence (A5) economy of expression (A5) reference maintains focus of paragraph (A5) contrast within the paragraph (A5) controlled overall structure (A5) thematic links between paragraphs (A5) sentence focus: passive (A5) controlled use of several subordinate clauses (A5) paragraphs varied in length and structure (A5) I have thought long and hard about who I would like to come into school, and have desided on my insperational icon, S ir D avid A ttenbour. I have chosen him for several reasons that I believe are good ones. Very high on my list is that he would provide an interesting experiance; he is well know for being in educational programs such as ‘ Blue Planet ’ and ‘The Privet Life of Plants’ so he would certinly be able to teach us about the creatures and plants of the world, maybe even inspire a few people to work with or study animals, like he did with me. He only inspired me through me watching DVDs , imagine if children met him in real life!Another thing he could do is show us some DVDs of some of the most amazing places on the planet, like, the deep sea, or the shara desert were animals have evoleved to survive the toughest of conditions . I am sure that the other children would enjoy that and surly they would learn about science at the same time? It’s like hitting two birds with one stone, we get entertained and we learn at the same time! Perfect for the busy school day! I would like to add that it would be possible that he could bring in some small creatures for us to see in real life, as that would definitely bring a smile to our faces! He could also bring a microscope and show us microscopic things. I have done that before and it is very interesting, I was fasinated and I think others would be too. Yet another good reason is that although many people may want you to invite a band member or somebody like that, my choice of S ir D avid A ttenbour could be the way to a whole new perseptive for some people , a perseptive that makes them realise that there is a whole world out there, one full of new and exciting things, most still undiscoved to humans, and that life is not just about make-up and music. So, on that note I would like to end my letter to tell you about my idea, and leave you to think about my choise. There are many good points to it and I hope you choose S ir D avid A ttenbour. From, [name]
18 The handwriting is legible and shows some features of regularity in size and spacing. However, overall the script is disjointed and uneven. Example awarded 1 mark Handwriting examples
19 The handwriting is legible and shows some features of regularity in size and spacing. However, overall the script is disjointed and uneven. Example awarded 1 mark
20 Overall, the handwriting is regular with some flow and movement. Letters and words are usually appropriate in size and position but there is some variation. Example awarded 2 marks
21 Overall, the handwriting is regular with some flow and movement. Letters and words are usually appropriate in size and position but there is some variation. Example awarded 2 marks
22 The handwriting is consistent and fluent with letters and words appropriately placed. The handwriting maintains a personal style to engage the reader. Example awarded 3 marks
23 The handwriting is consistent and fluent with letters and words appropriately placed. The handwriting maintains a personal style to engage the reader. Example awarded 3 marks
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25 The shorter task:Birdspotter The prompt explains that a wildlife organisation is undertaking a survey of birds. Pupils are asked to imagine that they have seen an unusual bird; the task is to write a detailed description of it. The prompt and formatted ‘Birdspotter Survey’ answer page make it clear that the description is for identification purposes. However, the nature of the bird is left entirely to the writer’s imagination. Support for content and vocabulary development is given in the planning space. Better performances are distinguished by the provision of a thorough, informative description of the bird, which is economically expressed through developed and varied sentence structures. This year Birdspo\b\ber, a wildlife organisation, is running a survey to identify and keep a record of all the birds that people see near where they live. You are out walking one day when you see an unusual looking bird. You rush home to get your camera, so that you can take a photograph to send to Birdspo\b\ber. However, when you get back the bird has gone. You decide to send a written description of the bird to Birdspo\b\berto see if they will be able to identify it. Remember, you will need to make sure that your description is as detailed as possible. You can make up the description using your imagination. PLANNING Think about: • where you saw the bird • words and phrases to describe the bird (eg size, colour, features, sounds, behaviour). Remember, your task is to write a description. You will not receive marks for pictures or decoration. Birdspotter Your task is to write a detailed description of the unusual looking bird.
26 \bark scheme for the shorter task: Birdspotter Band D1 SECTIO\b DSENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION AND TEXT ORGANISATION Assessment focuses: vary sentences for clarity, purpose and effect write with technical accuracy of syntax and punctuation in phrases, clauses and sentences construct paragraphs and use cohesion within and between paragraphs Clauses usually grammatically accurate, mostly joined with \bnd, but. Some simple sentences, often a brief sequence starting with subject + verb (The bird w\bs). Some connections between sentences, eg pronouns referring to the bird (the bird, it). Sentences sometimes demarcated by capital letters and full stops. 1 mark Simple connectives \bnd, but, when, or, solink clauses. Subjects and verbs frequently repeated (It w\bs, It h\bd). Noun phrases mostly simple (the he\bd) or with simple expansion (\b yellow be\bk). Some sentences expanded with simple adverbials (\bt the top, outside). Some simple adjectives (thin, sm\bll). Connections between sentences built up (he\bd w\bs re\blly tiny / like its he\bd). Full stops, capital letters, exclamation marks and question marks mostly accurate; commas used in lists. 2 marks Sentences are mostly grammatically sound. Some subordination, eg bec\buse, if (if I w\bs quiet ). Adverbials ( when I s\bw the bird ) and expanded noun phrases ( \b str\bnge pecking sound) vary construction of sentences. Tense choice is generally consistent and appropriate. Some variation in subjects ( I, its t\bil ). \bdeas developed within sections. Connections between ideas maintained through ongoing references ( this sm\bll bird ). Most sentences correctly demarcated; some commas mark phrases or clauses. 3 marks Simple and complex sentences with varied connectives, eg which, until , while . Expanded phrases and clauses express ideas economically ( I w\bs c\bsu\blly strolling down the street when ). Main ideas supported by organisation of sentences and/or sections of text ( Not only did it h\bve str\bnge fe\btures … ). Range of punctuation used, almost always correctly, eg brackets, dashes, colons. 4 marks Band D2 L:-dANG L:-dANH
27 Band E1 SECTIO\b ECO\bPOSITION AND EFFECT Assessment focuses: write imaginative, interesting and thoughtful texts produce texts which are appropriate to task, reader and purpose Content may include brief coverage of several aspects of the bird or may focus on one aspect, eg description of what the bird looks like; may include listing (blue he\bd, red eyes). Writing shows evidence of viewpoint, eg some objective description / some evaluative comment (good to look \bt). Some vocabulary describes the bird (noisy, l\brge) although other references are general (things, \b lot). 2 –3 marks Coverage is balanced, eg includes several aspects relating to the bird. Detail supports informative purpose of description (body w\bs 10cm long ..., like \b chicken). Viewpoint is established and maintained, eg writer includes helpful information (it w\bs e\bting \bn \bpple) / appears impressed with the bird’s features (be\butiful wings). Some straightforward stylistic features used to support purpose, eg careful word choice to describe the bird (bright blue fe\bthers, he\bd looked soft). 4 –5 marks Adaptation for reader, eg makes suggestions to assist with identification (seemed \bbout the size of \b robin). Thorough coverage. Viewpoint is consistent and controlled, eg writer describes situation with confidence (on the other wing it w\bs \b different colour scheme, \b dull brown in the dim light). Some stylistic features add emphasis and interest, eg technical or precise vocabulary (wingsp\bn, c\bmoufl\bged for its surroundings, hovering, timid). 6 –7 marks Reader and purpose inform choice and placing of content, eg writer prioritises most significant information. Viewpoint well controlled and convincing, eg writer appears authoritative by comparing other experiences (w\bs gliding like \b p\br\bchute being rele\bsed). A range of stylistic features, eg use of specific terminology; descriptive vocabulary (hooked t\blons, muscul\br neck, plum\bge of purple \bnd gold). \b marks Band E2 L:-dAOG L:-dAOH L:-dAO\b A short series of observations about the bird or a list of attributes. Detail sometimes included to expand content, eg simple description (it w\bs big). 1 mark
28 COMPOSITION & EFFECT Some detail for occasional development ( just, yello and white spots ); coverage focuses mainly on one aspect (E2). Some evidence of simple viewpoint ( it was beauifull) (E2). Word choice mostly general ( sort of); description is repetitive ( saft firer blue ) (E2). Summary This simple description contains little expansion of content and gives a very simple expression of how the writer feels about the unusualbird, suggesting award in Band E2. More content coverage (for example, brief description of another aspect of the bird) would benecessary for the award of the higher mark in the band. Band E2 – 2 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION Summary The use of a simple adverbial, noun phrases with limited expansion and simple connectives suggest award in Band D2. Although sentence demarcation is limited, evidence of linkage in the text confirms the mark. Band D2 – 2 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION noun phrases with some expansion (D2) connection built up (D2) simple adverbial (D2) sentence demarcation (D2) simple connectives (D2) There was one day i saw a bird in the sickormor tree and it looked like, sort of saft firer blue little tweety bird, it was beauifull . It was olny little though just the write size for the bird . the colour of the bird was sort of a saft firer blue, with yello and white spots on its body.
29 SENTENCE STRUCTUREPUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION OaW@acV:VaYABARSSRO: Content includes some simple contextualisation ( I was out playing ), with some limited development about the bird ( limping like it had a broke wing ) (E2). Writer’s point of view is apparent ( Looked quite unusual) (E2). Some word choice adds detail to the description of the bird ( yellow eye ball ); other vocabulary is more general ( four legs, two wings ) (E2). Summary In this simple piece, the writer has presented a straightforward recount of the experience with some development. Together withsome detail in the description of the bird, and some evaluation, there is sufficient evidence for the higher mark in Band E2. Band E2 – 3 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION Summary The use of some noun phrases with simple expansion and repeated simple connectives suggest award in Band D2. Some evidence of accurate sentence demarcation and connection between sentences confirm the mark. Band D2 – 2 marks repeated simple connectives (D2) limited expansion of noun phrases (D2) connection built up between sentences (D2) accurate sentence demarcation (D2) Dear Birdspotter it’s Monday morning I was out playing when i saw a bird it Looked quite unusual so i ran home to get the camera when I got back it was gone. So I thought i would write to you to describe it. T he bird had four legs, two wings. The coulour of it is black and orange. it had a green eye ball and 1 yellow eye ball. A blue beak . It was limping like it had a broke wing thats why I left it to get the camara. It sounded a bit like a goose. Thank you bird spotter !!!!! !!!!! Thankyou!
30 SENTENCE STRUCTUREPUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION OaW@acV:VaYABARSSRO: Development of description ( like the sea,pure blue ) and detail ( the bird was about 20cm long ) supports informative purpose and provides coverage (E\b). Establishment of viewpoint; writer appears impressed ( magnifersent courlful bird ,makes flying look so easy ) (E\b). Some careful word choice ( parashoot, just slowly floting ); some repetitive use weakens effect ( exsotic / exsotice ,creacher / creacher’s ) (E\b). Summary Description of the bird’s appearance, movement and sound is developed through the use of detail and some vocabulary to support purpose; the writer’s attitude towards the bird is made clear. Thesefeatures give evidence for award in Band E\b. For the higher mark in the band, further descriptive choices to limit repetition would be necessary. Band E3 – 4 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION Summary Evidence for Band D\b includes the use of adverbials, expanded noun phrases and varied subjects. The development of ideas and mostly accurate sentence demarcation support the award of the mark. Band D3 – 3 marks development of ideas (D\b) expanded noun phrases (D\b) sentence demarcation (D\b) variation in subjects (D\b) adverbials (D\b) Y ersterday at 1:45pm in [place name] country park I saw this magnifersent courlful bird . T he size of the bird was about 20cm long and 10 cm tall . T he coulers of this creacher are exsotic, they are all of the coulers of the rainbow also lot’s more too. When this amazing creacher fly’s it’s like a parashoot, just slowly floting though the air it makes flying look so easy. That is not all the way’s it move it moves sideway’s like crab, It waddles like a penguian last but not least It sorwes though the sky. This exsotice creacher’s sound is a quack like a duck. They hang around In groups of 5. There baby’s don’t have any couler when they are born there are just plain gray with blue eye’s like the sea, pure blue.
31 SENTENCE STRUCTUREPUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION OaW@acV:VaYABARSSRO: Detail given to inform the reader ( 20cm across and 10cm tall); development of different aspects ( eating, claws , noise ) provides balance (E\b). A measured and objective view of the bird is offered ( seamed harmless ,it was a very fast flyer ) (E\b). Some apt selection of vocabulary ( squaking, pierced ,frightened ) and comparisons contributes to the impression of the bird (E\b). Summary This developed and purposeful description of the bird establishes the writer as a careful observer and creates interest for the reader, leadingto an award in Band E\b. This, combined with some use of style to support the depiction of the bird, is sufficient for the higher mark inthe band. Band E3 – \b marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION Summary Use of adverbials, subordination, expanded noun phrases and variation in subjects suggest award in Band D\b. Mostly accurate sentence demarcation, including a comma to mark clauses, supports the award in this band. Band D3 – 3 marks comma marks divisions (D\b) sentence demarcation (D\b) connections maintained between ideas (D\b) adverbials (D\b) expanded noun phrases (D\b) varied subjects (D\b) subordination (D\b) Dear birdspotter magazine, I have recently seen a strange bird in the woods. I was hoping you could help me. T he bird was approxemetly 20cm across and 10cm tall. It was black with blue spots but seamed harmless. I saw it eating some oak tree leaves. Furturemore its claws were very sharp as I could see them from my veiw. The bird made a very loud squaking noise which pierced my ears . Also it was a very fast flyer. It could jump as high as a kangeroo. It wasn’t frightened because as I got nearer to it , it never flew away. After all this information I hope you can find out what my bird is. When you have please can you write back.
32 SENTENCE STRUCTURE PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION OaW@acV:VaYABARSSRO: The description of the bird is adapted by the comparisons with other birds ( size and shape of a sparrow ,cockrells ) and the thoroughness of observations ( hairs on its body but feathers on its wings ) (E4). Viewpoint is mainly consistent: the writer presents considered opinions ( fairly different , as if to make sure they are still working) (E4). Use of some precise vocabulary to describe the bird creates interest ( alternating stripes , constantly flapping ), but not entirely sustained (E4). Summary This description of an unusual bird uses some effective vocabulary and gives a reflective depiction of the encounter, suggesting an awardin Band E4. Further consistency of stylistic features up to the end ofthe piece would be necessary for the higher mark in the band. Band E4 – 6 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION Summary Controlled sentence structures, with varied connectives and the use of expanded phrases and clauses for economy suggest award in Band D4; further evidence is provided by the development of sections organised around particular features of the bird, together with a range of punctuation. Band D4 – 4 marks economical expression (D4) varied connectives (D4) complex sentence (D4) range of punctuation (D4): comma to mark a clause dash exclamation mark development of main idea within a section (D4) The bird I’ve encountered was the size and shape of a sparrow , although the colour was fairly different– it had a main colour of green with alternating stripes of red and blue . The head was a dark brown with white patches around the eyes. The bird seemed to have hairs on its body but feathers on its wings, constantly flapping them, as if to make sure they are still working. Its song was a mix of a cockrells and a crows making a cockrow sound as it jumped from branch to branch. I happened to notice that it never left the beach tree it was jumping on, even though there was no sign of a nest in the tree! If the bird can not be identified, I would like to call it a cockrow, from i’ts call.
33 SENTENCE STRUCTUREPUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION OaW@acV:VaYABARSSRO: Purpose informs placing of content: realistic context established ( which is unlucky ) before fantastical bird described in convincing detail ( orange fur wrapped tightly , one eye situatuated ) (E5). Writer’s viewpoint is authoritative and well informed ( to protect it’s nest ) (E5). Specific terminology combined with descriptive vocabulary give credence to fantastical bird ( flame red \bnteni). Adoption of formal language suggests confidence ( therefore I must describe it to you ) (E5). Summary This convincing and imaginative description effectively portrays the bird for identification purposes. The writer’s choice of a formal styleand well controlled viewpoint give credibility to the depiction and lead to an award of the top mark, Band E5. Band E\b – 8 marks SENTENCE STRUCTURE, PUNCTUATION & TEXT ORGANISATION Summary Use of varied complex sentence structures, developed to convey additional detail economically, suggests the award of Band D4. Range of punctuation and text grouping combines to provide sufficient evidence for the award of the highest mark. Band D4 – 4 marks text organisation: related content clearly grouped (D4) Opening establishes clear context for the sighting (D4) varied connectives (D4) economical expression (D4) expanded phrase and clause (D4) range of punctuation (D4): commas to mark a phrase dash brackets for an additional comment complex sentences (D4) Dear Birdspotter I have recently seen a bird whilst I was out walking and can not identify what it is. When I saw it I did not have a camera on me , which is unlucky , so therefore I must describe it to you to create a vivid picture in your mind of it’s apperance. The apperance of this bird is as followed – orange fur wrapped tightly round it’s small body and a non- beeked head with one eye situatuated in the middle of it, sat on top of it’s body with a flame red Anteni resting on top ( I would say it was about 20 cm long ) which brung the creatures total length to about 70 cm. It was stood carefully on a thin branch coming from an oak tree and shreeked loudly when I aproached it, to protect it’s nest, which was filled with blue eggs, with orange spots on. If I knew what this creature was it would really help.Yours faithfully [name]
34 The spelling test The following conventions should be followed when marking spelling: if more than one attempt is made, it must be clear which version the pupil wishes to be marked spellings can be written in upper or lower case, or a mixture of the two if a word has been written with the correct sequence of letters but these have been separated into clearly divided components, with or without a dash, the mark is not awarded if a word has been written with the correct sequence of letters but an apostrophe or hyphen has been inserted, the mark is not awarded. The words omitted from the pupils’ spelling test are those printed in boldin the version below. Atlantis The story of Atlantis is a myth. Atlantis is by many to be an ancient island that sank into the ocean. It was home to an advanced civilization that had many nations. The island into the sea, apparently disappearing during an earthquake. The possibility that Atlantis was real has been throughout history. This idea has been rejected because there is not enough that it existed. Plato, a Greek writer, made the recorded reference to Atlantis about 2,500 years ago. According to Plato’s version of the myth, the Greek gods the planet between. Poseidon, the god of the sea, received the island of Atlantis as his share. famous believed supposedly\bonquered \bollapsed dis\bussed usually eviden\be earliest divided themselves Poseidon shared Atlantis amongst his children. The eldest son, Atlas, was given the mountain where he was born and the area as his kingdom. Atlas was made king of the entire island and the ocean, which was called the Atlantic Ocean in his . Atlas made his birthplace into a city and enclosed it with three moats of width which were separated by rings of land. The of Atlantis then built bridges over the moats. There have been of locations proposed for Atlantis, most of them in or near the Mediterranean Sea. The legend of Atlantis is featured in many books, films, television series and other works. eventually surrounding neighbouring honour \bir\bular in\breasing inhabitants dozens \breative
35 Quick reference mark scheme for the spelling test 1. famous11. themselves 2. believed 12. neighbouring 3. supposedly 13. eventually \b. conquered 1\b. surrounding 5. collapsed 15. honour 6. discussed 16. circular 7. usually 17. increasing 8. evidence 18. inhabitants 9. earliest 19. dozens 10. divided 20. creative Number of Spelling \borre\bt words test mark 00 1– 3 1 \b – 62 7– 9 3 10 –12 \b 13 –15 5 16 –18 6 19 – 20 7 Scoring spelling Markers will record the total number of words spelt correctly, out of 20, in the box on the cover of the shorter writing task and spelling test booklet. The conversion of the spelling test mark, from out of 20 words to out of 7 marks, will be done automatically when the total score out of 20 is entered into the online mark system. \bf the spelling test is being marked without the use of the online mark system the spelling mark, out of 20, has to be converted to a mark out of 7, using the conversion table below.
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